we live a lazy life
This last month of time has been spent going to school. An unlikely place for creative work, but I managed to convince my Broadcast and Electronic Communication Arts (BECA) research professor that writing an essay on drug use and 20th century music would fit the guidelines for the course.
It never did, but it did allow me to research the topic. It stemmed from the moment I asked myself, “Do drug addicts make better music?” I didn’t attempt to answer that question mainly because what I consider good music, someone else might think is trash. So, aqui esta…
August 24th, 2007 at 12:44
What I like about the essay: The subject matter, and the research examples you dug up. The intro also held promise with a voice of opinion and wonder, something the rest of the essay lacked.
The problem is that there is no single narrative guiding the reader, the paragraphs feel disjointed and unarranged, it’s like walking through your mind as you consider things to write.
However, the last six sentences are pretty sweet too, so I guess you can say that the bread in you sandwich is calling out for proper filling. Throw down on some more drafts for this one. Perhaps change it from a research paper to a conversational essay.